I am shamelessy seeking opinions of this poem! Feel like letting me know what you think of it? Thank you!!
Mhorashty
Evil bubble of perception...stinking of carrion., prurient interests...seeking favorable reception... Gentle souls as they flower, succulent dining results...causing the stalwart to falter, spitting cruel insults. Road to destruction, craving adulation.... capering, fawning...offering obscene copulation... As incentive, demanding mass destruction...gentle souls no more...rancid decay...inviting corruption.
Lovers of carrion, riding ruby eyed vultures...gleefully snickering...decimating peaceful, pastoral cultures... Disdaining sword and more honorable weapons...cruel soul eaters...shapeshifters...preferring deception. Carnal lures their armament, viscious desires...whispered in countless ears, infernal plan requires... Willing perversion of other's morality...co-operation....eager inductees are found, across every nation.
Oh soulless Mhorashty, freely walking amongst us---offered comfortable flesh lodging---festering places inside us... What gift was it, you offered during carnal embraces...evil truth to be found...in ancient graveyards...and other foul places. Brief fleeting pleasures you offered, high prices demanded---parasitical lust consummated, rampant chaos demanded... As flies among entrails, celebrating awful deception...no shortage of souls, offer adoring reception.
Beautiful Mhorashty, ancient tellers of lies... Herald anticipated return, of the Lord of Flies.
They roam the world of the mortals for unknown reasons but seem to be drawn to death like fleas to a dead corpse. They're said to wander freely between our world and the Netherworlds but more is not known. In other contexts they're also seen in connection with Etherus as creatures of lust and the sins of love although their alignment to death and destruction seems to be pre-dominant.
I don't think you have seen this one, Yet-----Opinion???
Hunger
Desire surges, inflamed blood boiling---Adramelech's awful serpent uncoiling... Throw off the shroud, escape confinement---desire rejects reason's cruel refinement... Images perceived, foul actions concieved---pressure building, satisfy this unholy need... From ancient legend, unappended---dreadful repetition, another life ended.
Unwary citizens intent, embroiled---in life's pursuit, mortality destined to be soiled.... A chance encounter, vicious carnage enacted---mortal death the price exacted.... Satisfaction achieved, pathetic husk discarded---breif death memories uselessly imparted... To one to whom such pitiful sharing---tis but a footnote, incapable of caring.
Dark ancient predator,freely ranging---at large among us, filthy desire never changing... Hunger rampant, fell nature shamelessly displayed---man's sacrifice leaves lesser gods dismayed... Myth and darkness veil his movement---religion and doctrine boast meager improvement... Assyrian lunacy, imprudent preistly creation---assuming form in latter days, embraced by every nation.
Succor forever denied... Only disdain for those who died!
Here is an old one slightly reworked and renamed. Quite a departure for me lol---try it and let me know????
Dragonbayne
Birthed.. 'tween twilight and dawn -----two hearts delicately woven... A bit of flesh------an ancient soul, goodness surrepticiously chosen. Proud heart circulating the whisper of nephillum---dim legends recalled... From times long past, when the world was young, and mortal men pathetically small. Into our time, arrival hardly noted....vengeful destiny already spoken.
Wrongs to right, powerful images on display-----angry eyes aware... Innocence soothed---scrambling evil---unable to hide anywhere. Fragile souls she leaves untouched----evil one's, sentence carved in flesh... Just and true---revenge at last exacted---the world again refreshed Ruffian's heart gentled---duty done---won't anyone care?
Alive and vital, she quests Painful living, refusing rest
Saturn, visible in midnight skyes... ascends as plaintive mortal cries.... Beseech uncaring ears in vain....this fell cycle must not come again.
Dark vehicle for madness struts....ancient legend, once quiet, stirring in jagged ritual cuts... In days long past, beyond mortal understanding...Zagan presided, jealous right hand of evil demanding... Obescience of writhing, unwashed masses...disdaining the rule, driving infernal unholy clashes... Escalating dementia, speaks in tongues too familiar...lustful designs appear logical, will heaven's innocence surrender?
Corruptors of innocence, betrayers of trust...gaining acendency by default, birthing Zagar's insatiable lust. Come to him now, you too willing slaves of desire....corruption of beauty, is the price that's required. Lasting peace an illusion, fanciful daydreams entrust....fragile innocence the admission...left lifeless as dust. Zagar's rebirth foretold, awful knowlege scarce hidden...wretched man-souls, once priceless, fit only for midden.
The twentieth upon you, arriving in fire....trumpets death to the beauty mortal souls doth require... Hark you legions, bleating, insupportable excuses...stinking of midden, honor lost among, unspeakable abuses. The beast, at last, comes round for the feast...promised by prophets, humanity's horror unleashed.... Zagar.....gatekeeper, Leiutenant of Hell....free amongst us again, lies...all he can tell.
Transmuting heartsblood to bitter wine... Worship mammon, let Zagar's ascendancy shine
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